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Hopes in Dreams by ~c4rri3:iconc4rri3:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Dark




dusty tears
behind those eyes
once green now dark
like tunnels into an empty soul
she'll realize that time has flown
and taken its course
and she is alone
the day is done and she is alone
until the night gets cold
as she lays to rest
when her eyes start to close
and she’s doing her best
to block out the sound of the ticking clock
that slowly makes its way around
never stops

tick
     tock
          tick...

drifting into a relaxing sleep
no one to yell no one to scream
sailing so far away
so quiet and ever so sweet
nightmares erased come morning with the sun
she’ll wish her dreams became reality
but then again, doesn’t everyone
©2003-2009 ~c4rri3
:iconc4rri3:

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:iconkneenay:
*kneenay Oct 15, 2003, 6:32:27 PM
wow...
i like it
the words flow along smoothly and the imagery..nice job carrie :)
keep it up

--
"He who cannot forgive others breaks the bridge over which he must pass himself; for every man has need to be forgiven." Thomas Fuller
:iconrottedaspersions:
~rottedaspersions Oct 15, 2003, 7:37:39 PM
Oo. I like the flow of this, it's very smooth and beautiful. And no, I don't mind that you changed the title ^.^

--
Spend some quality time with the demon of mine;
I like the way you struggle, but you know Im here to win.
Spend some quality time with my borrowed smile;
The gleam is replaced, rip me open and erase me
:icon404error:
~404error Oct 15, 2003, 10:06:33 PM
I can relate to it and it's easy to read...poetry usually isn't for me. Makes me so sad though :(

:hug: :heart:

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:|
This is not a signature.
:iconbindey:
~bindey Oct 16, 2003, 3:46:07 AM
This is..


so smoothy a poem has to be ;)


verry toutching..

I love it, yes I do!


:hug:


+fav!!!
:iconurban-khaos:
~urban-khaos Oct 16, 2003, 4:55:44 AM
i love the tick
tock
tick bit ...excellenty ...yeah imagery ....i see :)

--
I'm nice. Honest. I have the heart of a little girl

in a jar
on my desk - Stephen king

My Manifesto
:iconkriptiknerve:
~kriptiknerve Oct 16, 2003, 3:10:51 PM
It's 'aight' but...I dunno...maybe I'm not in a poemy mood right now :(

Anyways, good job goose. <3
:iconcrazyc4t:
~crazyc4t Oct 16, 2003, 8:28:46 PM
well,
maybe you could write something happy for a change...
;-)
:iconfirstfooter:
=firstfooter Oct 18, 2003, 12:46:02 AM
:+favlove:

perfect flow and wonderful images and emotion - i love it!!! :nod:

--
we live thinking we will never die.
we die thinking we had never lived.
cut it out.
:iconlivingbyair:
=livingbyair Oct 18, 2003, 9:48:28 AM
yup - you need a hug - *runs and tackles her, HA! You'll never escape! mwahahah ;)
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